Going to be an unpopular opinion here. But i think the mixing of sharp curves, with very pixelish, textured hand is not really playing well together. Mixing these two styles are not easy and I have tried and failed several times. So I don’t think I can help much. But this really needs some rework IMO. I know this is not your artwork, so I’m just expressing what I felt.
I just wish every word in it, turned out to be true. What have we done?