94 outdoor cats got rainbow sleeves added to their collars.
After the sleeves were attached, the amount of birds that the cats brought home dropped by two thirds.
The amount of mice brought home remained consistent. This is because the mice cannot see the colors on the rainbow sleeve, but the birds can.
I took one semester of neurolinguistics and this reminds me of “garden path” sentences. Sentences that are grammatical at the syntax level, but sort of leads your brain into the wrong place and so “feels” ungrammatical.
“The old man the boat”
“The horse raced past the barn fell”
I’m not saying it’s quite the same, but my brain sure as fuck struggled to parse “the birds carried back through the flap fell”
Yep, much clearer how you’ve written it out. If they wanted to keep it as a run-on sentence
“94 cats were fitted with rainbow sweaters in a test which resulted in a two-thirds reduction in the number of dead birds brought home, with no noted reduction in dead mice brought home, this is believed to be because birds can see the rainbow colours while the mice cannot.”
Much longer though when written with the signposting relational additions.
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Nah, its fucked.
94 outdoor cats got rainbow sleeves added to their collars.
After the sleeves were attached, the amount of birds that the cats brought home dropped by two thirds.
The amount of mice brought home remained consistent. This is because the mice cannot see the colors on the rainbow sleeve, but the birds can.
I took one semester of neurolinguistics and this reminds me of “garden path” sentences. Sentences that are grammatical at the syntax level, but sort of leads your brain into the wrong place and so “feels” ungrammatical.
“The old man the boat” “The horse raced past the barn fell”
I’m not saying it’s quite the same, but my brain sure as fuck struggled to parse “the birds carried back through the flap fell”
Yep, much clearer how you’ve written it out. If they wanted to keep it as a run-on sentence
“94 cats were fitted with rainbow sweaters in a test which resulted in a two-thirds reduction in the number of dead birds brought home, with no noted reduction in dead mice brought home, this is believed to be because birds can see the rainbow colours while the mice cannot.”
Much longer though when written with the signposting relational additions.